Ace Markaa

Wow, so detailed, I hate to write this meager response, but I think Jack-a-Lynn has gone far deeper into this then I ever thought a reader would. Spotting errors I ...

A lot of other writers have the same issues, code names or types on which their characters are based on for inspiration. This is how those 'who would play who' ...

Too harsh? I am known for being honest and not to sugar coat the matter, but breaking several cornerstones of writing foundations for a first person perspective merged with narration-like ...

The problem still exists. This title of 'The White One' is just bad form in a short story when it cannot be properly developed. History means nothing when the story ...

Ace Markaa, I can clearly see what you mean about losing focus a couple of times but I'm here to explain a couple things for you. I'm not sure you ...

Maria's speech patterns are fragments or awkward. This sentence is missing 'was'. "It was how I programmed" The cake is a lie!? O.o If Titani is that stupid to believe ...